Review my SEO site

pls review my site i have done seo for <URL SNIPPED> ,i need expert comment on both of my site from SEO point of view that what should be done to achieve my keywods, what kind of changes i required from SEO point of view, does it seo friendly or not so on.....

review it and say your expert comments on it.......

Forum rules prohibit any site specific mention. However, a discussion of your techniques would be interesting to discuss:-)